Editing

Crafting Engaging Dialogue: Breathing Life Into Your Characters’ Conversations


Dialogue is one of the most powerful tools a writer has to convey character, advance plot, and immerse readers in the story. But it can also be one of the trickiest elements to master. Stiff, unrealistic dialogue can pull readers out of the narrative, while natural, engaging conversations draw them deeper into your world. Here are some tips to help you create dialogue that feels authentic, dynamic, and compelling.

1. Let Your Characters Speak Like Real People (But Not Exactly)

Real-life conversations are often filled with filler words, tangents, and pauses, but that doesn’t mean your characters should talk like that on the page. Dialogue in fiction should feel natural while still being more polished than everyday speech.

Avoid long-winded exchanges or repetitive phrases that bog down the narrative. Each line should serve a purpose—whether it’s revealing something about a character, building tension, or moving the story forward. But make sure it’s not too perfect; leaving in the occasional “uh” or “well” can add authenticity.

2. Show, Don’t Tell

Dialogue is a great way to show rather than tell your readers what a character is feeling or thinking. Instead of telling readers that a character is angry, let their words reflect that emotion. Short, clipped sentences can show frustration, while rapid-fire exchanges can indicate rising tension. Likewise, a character who stumbles over their words might be nervous or unsure.

Example:

  • Telling: “I’m really mad at you,” John said angrily.
  • Showing: “Oh, so this is what we’re doing now?” John’s voice was sharp, his fingers gripping the table’s edge.

3. Keep It Concise

In real life, we might spend several minutes debating something mundane, but in fiction, you want to avoid lengthy, irrelevant conversations. Your dialogue should get to the point and focus on what matters to the story. Long speeches or overly detailed explanations can lose readers’ interest.

When in doubt, trim the excess. Can you say the same thing with fewer words? Readers will appreciate a brisk pace.

4. Differentiate Your Characters’ Voices

Every character should have a unique voice, and their dialogue should reflect their personality, background, and current emotional state. A college professor might use more complex words, while a teenager might speak more casually. A confident character will sound different from someone who’s shy or insecure.

Listen for individual rhythms, quirks, and styles of speech. Even without dialogue tags, readers should be able to tell who’s speaking based on how they talk.

5. Use Subtext and Implication

Sometimes, the most powerful dialogue is what isn’t said. People rarely speak their minds outright, especially in emotionally charged situations. Let your characters’ words carry deeper meanings, using subtext to imply their true feelings.

Example:

  • Explicit: “I’m sorry I cheated on you. I made a huge mistake.”
  • Subtle: “Look, I never meant for this to happen. You know that, right?”

The second example carries the weight of an apology without saying it outright, leaving room for tension and interpretation.

6. Add Action and Reactions

Dialogue shouldn’t exist in a vacuum. Break up lines with actions or reactions that add texture to the scene. This helps avoid the “talking heads” effect, where it feels like characters are just spouting words without moving or interacting with their environment.

For instance, instead of just having characters exchange words during a heated argument, show their body language: clenched fists, pacing, or looking away. This adds depth to their emotions and the scene.

Example:

  • “Fine, you win,” Sarah muttered, slamming the drawer shut and turning away.

7. Avoid Information Dumps

While dialogue can be a tool for delivering information, be careful not to turn it into an info dump. Characters shouldn’t sound like they’re lecturing or giving the reader a history lesson. If you need to convey a lot of information, break it up with actions, inner thoughts, or let the reader discover some of the details naturally as the story progresses.

Final Thoughts

Engaging dialogue draws readers into your story, makes characters feel real, and keeps the narrative flowing smoothly. By using dialogue to show emotions, reveal character traits, and advance the plot, you’ll create conversations that your readers won’t want to skip.

Remember, I’m a professional copy editor and proofreader that is happy to help with any of your manuscript needs!


What challenges do you face when writing dialogue? Share your experiences in the comments—I’d love to hear what strategies work for you!

Cheers!

Book Reviews

Intense Nordic Tale: Freya’s Transformation and Bjorn’s Love | Review

Rating: ★★★★★
Spice: 🌶️🌶️

This one deserves all the stars. I adored every minute of this. For some reason, Vikings are one of my favorites to read about. The ferocity of everything they do makes things so much more intense. Be that their love, their fighting, literally just their existing.

Freya is one part badass, one part impulsive, another part loyal, and yet still one more part endearing. Bjorn is one spicy, fiery, sweet, and caring Viking that has raided my shores for my heart. Okay, that was cheesy. But still, he’s a top notch book boyfriend.

It is hard to keep one’s wits when faced with a woman as beautiful as the sight of shore to a man who has been lost at sea.

Bjorn is hilariously poetic even when he does not mean to be, but the above quote is by fat one of the sweetest things I think he tells Freya.

I love the growth that Freya goes through in this, and it’s been awhile since I read a book that didn’t have a POV in the male lead’s eyes. However, it was actually refreshing to not immediately have answers to what was happening in Bjorn’s head. Danielle really takes us on a journey through this and not just across the map of Skaland. We see Freya go from beaten and downtrodden to finding her voice to questioning her voice to really leaning into the emotions she feels.

I will be anxiously waiting for the next installment of the Saga of the Unfated because I feel as though I’ve been left in an icy fjord waiting for a drakkar to come pick me up.

Have you read this one yet? How did you feel about Freya, Snorri, Bjorn, and Ylva? If you haven’t read this one yet, have you read any other Nordic/Viking books?

Cheers and happy reading!

Editing

Enhance Your Writing: The Power of Dynamic Verbs

Using descriptive and vivid verbs helps to ensure that there is dynamic movement and a deeper connection between what your characters are doing and what your reader is seeing in their head. Without verbs, you will have wonderful characters that are mimicking Sims characters that stand around without anything to do.

Movement obviously helps to move your character, but it helps to move the plot forward. Without action, your characters cannot do anything with the other characters or perhaps it is a mystery and there is a piece of evidence in the room with them. Without being able to search in that room the character won’t ever discover that piece of evidence.

But! You don’t want to just look. When someone says they looked for something, we don’t hardly get any information about how that happened. Did Sally scour the windowsill looking for fingerprints? Did she gloss over the papers on the table only to miss a key element?

There are so many words out there that when used get the point across, but they don’t actually paint a picture unless paired with an adverb. Sure, the woman walked confidently, but when you swap walk for the word strut, now you don’t need confidently.

Here are a few words that we can swap for more descriptive verbs.

Walk: Stroll, hike, promenade, saunter, march, amble, stride, tread, pace, toddle, totter, stagger, perambulate

Run: Sprint, dart, bolt, canter, gallop, trot, zoom, hurry, speed, jog, saunter, scamper, hurtle, rush, scramble, spring, swing, swoop, dive, careen

Look: Observe, glance, stare, examine, peek, study, notice, see, glare, glaze over, scour, investigate

Go: Leave, depart, shift, take off, move on, quit, exit, take a hike, travel, drive, proceed, progress, run, walk away

Using these alternative verbs along with sensory details, you can enhance your readers’ experience! PS, if you need help with sensory details, you can find my post here!

Using say or said is totally fine! Once again though, we can give the reader more! The characters can shout, they can holler, they can stutter or mumbler, they can spit words like fire or groan them.

Saying there is something in the scene is an easy way to start painting the picture in the reader’s head, but with so many words available to us, we can swap out those two words with more vivid imagery.

There was a horn honking in the distance can go from that to: John jumped at the sound of a horn blaring through the silence, jolting him from his trip down memory lane.

Remember, it is always okay to keep things simple in some aspects. Everything doesn’t have to be flowery prose and if someone simply said something, then use that!

If these prompts don’t speak to you, snag a couple lines from one of your recent works and see about trying to rewrite them!

As always, I am a friendly and experienced copy editor with a passion for taking your written work from good to great! I’m always only a message away to chat! Feel free to drop a quick line in the comments and answer one of the prompts!

Cheers!

Book Reviews

Mysterious FMC in Cutthroat Grad School | Paranormal Reverse Harem Romance

Rating: ★★★★★
Spice: 🌶️🌶️
Tropes:
– Academy setting
– Reverse Harem
– Fated mates
– Curses
– Paranormal
– Hidden identity

I was not expecting this book at all. A cutthroat, blood thirsty grad school setting? I didn’t know I needed this in my life. Our FMC is mysterious as heck, we don’t know who she is or where she comes from, but man, does she give me Wednesday Adams vibes. We have four unique MMCs: an over-the-top protective dragon shifter with a temper, a frosty, smart as hell ice elemental with commitment issues, a psychotic incubus prince with some violent tendencies, and a morally grey blood fae with a curse that might be his undoing.

Watching the FMC futilely try to push them away was sheer comedy, and I loved every minute of it. The writing and pacing are so well done that it had me devouring this in a matter of hours.

My only drawback is that the third book isn’t out yet!

I am so surprised there are not more people talking about this book, and I will shout it from the rooftops that this book is amazing and worth the read!

Have you read this one yet? What was your last five star?

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Kindle Vella

The first 11 episodes of my story are up for viewing with more on the way if anyone is interested!

As a friendly reminder, it’s a college, sports romance between a football player playboy and the true crime loving athletic training student. They both sign up for the schools dating app turned tv show, only to match despite it being forbidden by the school for them to be together.

It’s spicy. It’s a little angsty. It’s giggle inducing.

You can try it out here!

Sunday Spotlight

Sunday Spotlight : Mina Brower

I had the pleasure of working on this book as the proofreader, but never has a book felt less like work than this one!

Blurb:

A single woman stands between order and chaos.

She will determine the fate of Taria.

An anomaly in the world that values the future over the ways of old, Renna is in great danger.

Possessing unexplained—and forbidden—magic, she now attracts unwanted, dangerous attention.

Amidst the chaos, there are two who desire her safety.

Khellios mourned her, living with guilt for the last two millennia. The God of Moon and Stars, he offers her a sanctuary in Taria, trying to rekindle the flame between them.

Sethos, a fae with unusual magic, has been guiding Renna from afar, drawing her nearer and keeping her safe. He now visits within her dreams.

Conflicted by her desires, Renna is pulled between the men who are willing to fight for her. But when a deadly force breaches the sanctuary and threatens to destroy Taria, she is faced with an impossible choice.

Embrace the life she’s wanted without magic with Khellios’s help, or accept her destiny as a daughter of chaos at Sethos’s side.

This book had everything I could want, and I’m already harassing Mina for the next book! I cannot wait to see what happens in Renna’s story!

Pre-order here!

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I did something today

So I did something huge today. I published an episode on Kindle Vella. It’s my first time publishing something I’ve written in the fiction realm. While I don’t think anyone will actually read it because I’m anxious about marketing it and it being me as the author and people knowing that, I am proud of myself for finally doing it.

Shoot, maybe I’ll finally finish the thing too!

However, if anyone is interested, you can find it for free here!

Here’s our cover for it!

Editing

4 ways to fix a comma splice.

Comma splices are so common. I think everyone was taught to just add a comma if you pause, but comma splices are just one problem that arises.

So what is a comma splice?

It happens when two independent clauses are joined by a comma and nothing else. It feels natural to take pause between those two clauses, but that pause should be a full stop period or it requires different punctuation and another device to reach a proper sentence.

So, what are the ways we can fix that?

1. You can use a conjunction!

Let’s throw it back to freshman English. Fanboys, do yall remember those? I’ll be honest, I forgot to use them all the time before I really got into focusing on grammar and writing.

2. Fix it with a semicolon!

Are your two clauses related to each other? Great! You can now get rid of the splicing comma by swapping it for a semicolon. Easy fix, right?

3. Fix it with a semicolon and a transition word.

This one adds a little flair to our last option. The transition is a bridge between two thoughts. However, although, in addition, furthermore, and understandably are all examples of those transitions.

4. Fix it with a period!

By far the easiest way to fix the comma splice is to just use a period. This is your best option when the two thoughts or clauses do not relate to each other.

Hopefully this helps someone out there! Happy writing!

Cayla

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Latest Book Mail

Book Mail always makes me feel so special. I love opening up my mailbox to find PR boxes and books I’ve pre ordered. It feels like Christmas year round, ha!

I totally was not expecting to receive Lucia Franco’s books, but I’ve been impatiently waiting for Heaven Breaker and A Curse of Blood and Wolves.

Hush Hush by Lucia Franco

Blurb:

I knew the rules.

Never reveal my true identity.
Play the game, give the illusion.
Don’t get close to the clients.

The dark and glamorous lifestyle of the rich and shameless open my eyes to a lavish world of sin and wealth, and a man I can’t have.

A man I desperately want—James Riviera.

We’re treading a fine line as we live the ultimate double life until we make a startling discovery that tests both our loyalties.
I only had to follow the rules, but rules are meant to be broken.

Find it here!

A Curse of Blood and Wolves by Melissa McTernan

Blurb:

Is it possible to be drawn to someone you’ve never met?

When Ruby feels the eyes of a stranger in the woods, she knows she should be scared, that she should run away, but she can’t. Instead, she feels a thrill, feels drawn to this stranger who follows her in the woods. Yearns for his eyes on her every night as she walks home, hoping to hear the crunch of leaves under his feet that signals he’s there.

Will he ever reveal himself?

After all, fate doesn’t make mistakes …

Spice level: 🌶️🌶️🌶️🌶️

Find it here!

Heaven Breaker by Sara Wolf

Blurb:

Bravery isn’t what you do. It’s what you endure.

The duke of the powerful House Hauteclare is the first to die. With my dagger in his back.

He didn’t see it coming. Didn’t anticipate the bastard daughter who was supposed to die with her mother―on his order. He should have left us with the rest of the Station’s starving, commoner rubbish.

Now there’s nothing left. Just icy-white rage and a need to make House Hauteclare pay. Every damn one of them.

Even if it means riding Heavenbreaker―one of the few enormous machines left over from the War―and jousting against the fiercest nobles in the system.

Each win means another one of my enemies dies. And here, in the cold terror of space, the machine and I move as one, intent on destroying each adversary―even if it’s someone I care about. Even if it’s someone I’m falling for.

Only I’m not alone. Not anymore.

Because there’s something in the machine with me. Something horrifying. Something…more.

And it won’t be stopped.

You can snag it here!

Happy reading, friends!

Cayla

General Bookish

Dearest beloved…oh wait

What personal belongings do you hold most dear?

Since this is a book blog, we’ll relate this back to my book collection.

But I think my old typewriter is one of my most dear possessions. It holds a special place in my heart because it relates to my love of reading, my job of editing, and my dream of writing.

Over the years, I’ve found solace and comfort between the pages of a book, I’ve found joy in my small editing business, and I’ve rediscovered my creativity in writing.

What is something that’s a little unconventional you hold dear?

Cayla