Editing

Crafting Engaging Dialogue: Breathing Life Into Your Characters’ Conversations


Dialogue is one of the most powerful tools a writer has to convey character, advance plot, and immerse readers in the story. But it can also be one of the trickiest elements to master. Stiff, unrealistic dialogue can pull readers out of the narrative, while natural, engaging conversations draw them deeper into your world. Here are some tips to help you create dialogue that feels authentic, dynamic, and compelling.

1. Let Your Characters Speak Like Real People (But Not Exactly)

Real-life conversations are often filled with filler words, tangents, and pauses, but that doesn’t mean your characters should talk like that on the page. Dialogue in fiction should feel natural while still being more polished than everyday speech.

Avoid long-winded exchanges or repetitive phrases that bog down the narrative. Each line should serve a purpose—whether it’s revealing something about a character, building tension, or moving the story forward. But make sure it’s not too perfect; leaving in the occasional “uh” or “well” can add authenticity.

2. Show, Don’t Tell

Dialogue is a great way to show rather than tell your readers what a character is feeling or thinking. Instead of telling readers that a character is angry, let their words reflect that emotion. Short, clipped sentences can show frustration, while rapid-fire exchanges can indicate rising tension. Likewise, a character who stumbles over their words might be nervous or unsure.

Example:

  • Telling: “I’m really mad at you,” John said angrily.
  • Showing: “Oh, so this is what we’re doing now?” John’s voice was sharp, his fingers gripping the table’s edge.

3. Keep It Concise

In real life, we might spend several minutes debating something mundane, but in fiction, you want to avoid lengthy, irrelevant conversations. Your dialogue should get to the point and focus on what matters to the story. Long speeches or overly detailed explanations can lose readers’ interest.

When in doubt, trim the excess. Can you say the same thing with fewer words? Readers will appreciate a brisk pace.

4. Differentiate Your Characters’ Voices

Every character should have a unique voice, and their dialogue should reflect their personality, background, and current emotional state. A college professor might use more complex words, while a teenager might speak more casually. A confident character will sound different from someone who’s shy or insecure.

Listen for individual rhythms, quirks, and styles of speech. Even without dialogue tags, readers should be able to tell who’s speaking based on how they talk.

5. Use Subtext and Implication

Sometimes, the most powerful dialogue is what isn’t said. People rarely speak their minds outright, especially in emotionally charged situations. Let your characters’ words carry deeper meanings, using subtext to imply their true feelings.

Example:

  • Explicit: “I’m sorry I cheated on you. I made a huge mistake.”
  • Subtle: “Look, I never meant for this to happen. You know that, right?”

The second example carries the weight of an apology without saying it outright, leaving room for tension and interpretation.

6. Add Action and Reactions

Dialogue shouldn’t exist in a vacuum. Break up lines with actions or reactions that add texture to the scene. This helps avoid the “talking heads” effect, where it feels like characters are just spouting words without moving or interacting with their environment.

For instance, instead of just having characters exchange words during a heated argument, show their body language: clenched fists, pacing, or looking away. This adds depth to their emotions and the scene.

Example:

  • “Fine, you win,” Sarah muttered, slamming the drawer shut and turning away.

7. Avoid Information Dumps

While dialogue can be a tool for delivering information, be careful not to turn it into an info dump. Characters shouldn’t sound like they’re lecturing or giving the reader a history lesson. If you need to convey a lot of information, break it up with actions, inner thoughts, or let the reader discover some of the details naturally as the story progresses.

Final Thoughts

Engaging dialogue draws readers into your story, makes characters feel real, and keeps the narrative flowing smoothly. By using dialogue to show emotions, reveal character traits, and advance the plot, you’ll create conversations that your readers won’t want to skip.

Remember, I’m a professional copy editor and proofreader that is happy to help with any of your manuscript needs!


What challenges do you face when writing dialogue? Share your experiences in the comments—I’d love to hear what strategies work for you!

Cheers!

Editing

The Art of Character Development: Tips for Creating Real and Relatable Characters

Character development is at the heart of any compelling fiction. Readers connect with stories through characters, so crafting relatable and well-rounded individuals is essential. Here are some tips to enhance your character development process.

1. Start with a Strong Foundation: Create detailed character profiles that include background, motivations, and desires. This foundational work informs their decisions and reactions throughout the story.

2. Show Growth and Change: Dynamic characters evolve over the course of the narrative. Allow them to learn from experiences, face challenges, and ultimately transform, making their journeys more engaging.

3. Use Flaws to Build Depth: Perfect characters can feel unrealistic. Give your characters flaws or insecurities that make them relatable and human. This complexity adds richness to their personalities.

4. Establish Clear Motivations: Understand what drives your characters. Whether it’s love, revenge, or a quest for knowledge, clear motivations guide their actions and decisions, creating a believable arc.

5. Create Diverse Relationships: Characters are often defined by their interactions with others. Develop relationships that reveal different facets of their personality, from friendships to rivalries.

6. Utilize Dialogue Effectively: Authentic dialogue can bring characters to life. Pay attention to their unique voices and ensure their speech patterns reflect their backgrounds and personalities.

7. Show, Don’t Tell: Rather than explicitly stating a character’s traits, illustrate them through actions, decisions, and interactions. This approach allows readers to infer and engage more deeply with the character.

8. Use Backstory Wisely: While backstory is important, reveal it gradually. Integrate it organically into the narrative to maintain pacing and keep the reader’s interest.

9. Avoid Stereotypes: Strive for originality by avoiding clichés. Give your characters unique traits, backgrounds, and experiences that set them apart.

10. Solicit Feedback: Don’t hesitate to share your characters with trusted peers. Their insights can help you refine character traits and ensure they resonate with readers.

By focusing on these aspects, you can create characters that not only drive your story but also linger in readers’ minds long after they’ve finished the book. Ultimately, well-developed characters are the key to crafting unforgettable fiction.

Cheers!

General Bookish

I did something today

So I did something huge today. I published an episode on Kindle Vella. It’s my first time publishing something I’ve written in the fiction realm. While I don’t think anyone will actually read it because I’m anxious about marketing it and it being me as the author and people knowing that, I am proud of myself for finally doing it.

Shoot, maybe I’ll finally finish the thing too!

However, if anyone is interested, you can find it for free here!

Here’s our cover for it!

Editing

Why it’s important to hire out for editing

It can be so easy to say editing is a luxury or proofreading doesn’t really matter, especially when your project isn’t some massive thing like a 200,000 word manuscript. However—I’m about to age myself here—let’s throw it back to that meme that went around Facebook. Actually, let me just drop one below.

Our brains a literally wired to fix mistakes, and we don’t even realize we’ve done it. We skip over double words, glance over typos, and rearrange sentences that are out of whack. This is especially true in our own writing because we know what we were intending to say. Due to this, it’s almost as if we’re blind to mistakes.

In addition to this, have you ever stared at a word long enough it doesn’t even look like a real word anymore. I’ll throw it back to when I had to write a word one hundred times if I misspelled it in school—wait y’all didn’t have to do that?

It may not be your forte.

And that’s okay! The nuances of the English language are complicated at best and nonsensical at worst. Your forte is your niche, so why try to shove a square peg in a round hole? You should be focused on your work, your creativity, your website, or whatever your project is rather than trying to force yourself to do a task that isn’t what you enjoy or feel perfect doing

Having a fresh set of eyes can pick up more mistakes.

Someone who has had no interaction with that particular project can pick up typos, mistakes, forgotten commas easier than someone who has been married to the project for weeks, months, or years. You glance over the to that should be too. Maybe a pesky comma sneaks through unnoticed or an em dash has an extra space or no space. It’s kind of like walking into a house you’re going to buy. The people who are selling the house didn’t notice that their photo wall is off center, but you, seeing the house for the time, notice it right off the bat. It’s like a neon sign. An editor or proofreader is like that home buyer, seeing those neon signs that are easy to miss when you’re the one living in the home.

Time! Time is such a limited resource.

As a writer, project coordinator, business owner, you have so much on your plate. Your time is stretched thin across all the things you have to do. You feel like you have to let things go just to make sure you meet deadlines or accomplish the other tasks on your list. There aren’t enough hours in the day.

I get it! It’s easy to become married to your project and feel like you can do it all, but why not share the burden? Commas, em dashes, typos, and structure are editors’ jam. Let us handle that while you do your thing.

Feel free to send me a message about your project and let’s chat!

Cayla

ARC Reviews, Book Reviews

Book Review: Just This Once – Lena Hendrix

I love all of Lena’s main male characters. Whip King was no different. I had the distinct pleasure of being sent this book as an ARC, and let me tell you, I was so thrilled to get my grubby paws on it.

I have been dying for the King’s side of the feud and more of their back story. This initial dive into their nuances left me wanting so much more. I cannot wait for this series to continue. As always with interconnected series and standalones, we get glimpses of other characters we’ve met before. Seeing Whip’s relationship with Lee in the fire house and the secret soft spot they all seem to have for Duke.

Back to Just This Once.

Hendrix gives us a spicy, sweet, cocktail with a piercing bite to it. Yes. Piercing is emphasized right there. One of my favorite things about Lena and her writing is her ability to give me just enough spice without compromising her incredible plots. Plus, she writes a killer feud that I’ve been hooked on finding more about for what six books now?

If you haven’t picked this one up yet, it’s available on KU—Here!

Happy reading, bookworms!

Book Reviews

Six of Crows and Crooked Kingdom duology

Overall, I have very mixed feelings about this set in the Grishaverse. Don’t get me wrong, I’ve really enjoyed my time so far in the Grishaverse, but this set and I had a hard time seeing eye to eye.

I wanted it to live up to the hype so badly, especially so because I really enjoyed the Shadow & Bone trilogy, even the cursed second book that suffered from second book syndrome.

I actually really liked the Oceans 11 vibe that LB was going for in SoC. I thought the heist aspect was actually pretty interesting. One of my hesitations for diving in whole heartedly was that the characters seemed like they should be mid-twenties instead of teenagers. I really and truly can’t see them being in their teens with how they act.

I also felt like some of the descriptions and inner monologues felt clinical rather than emotional or described by the POV we were reading. Which, I hated how much we jumped from POV to POV. Really and truly, in CK, it felt like we saw the same bit of time over and over again because we saw it from multiple POVs. There was also a lot of telling instead of showing of backstories, particularly Kaz.

Speaking of Kaz, (I will get flamed for this I know) I didn’t like him. From what I saw on Booksta, I thought there was going to be some great love story between him and Inej. That awkward moment when I felt like Inej had more chemistry with Jesper or Matthias than Kaz. He was also all bark and very little bite. With all of his threats he made to people, he only carried out a seldom few. On top of that, I found it hard to believe that he was the most ruthless in Ketterdam as a teenager.

Inej was a queen. Nina was great, but her whole fabrication of the lie surrounding why she got Matthias sent to prison annoyed me. I also literally do not remember a description of her including being overweight. Somewhere I remember it being said she was curvy, but I see fan art all over the place where she is overweight. Jesper, I liked him. Sharpshooter, farm boy, secret Grisha. I liked him. He actually seemed relatable to a teenager because he was impulsive when it came to gambling and still had the foolhardy sense to go into shootouts without much fear which relates back to that teenage ideology that “it won’t happen to me.”

Don’t crucify me, I loved baby Wylan……but I forgot he was there a lot. Matthias. I loved him. While I liked Nina and liked the idea of Helnik…..I liked the idea of Inej and Matthias more. The fact that I can see Matthias with someone other than who LB planned is a problem. If she was writing with their end ship in mind, then I shouldn’t be able to say that Matthias and Inej would actually make a better couple than Nina and Matthias.

I say this because they seem like they would have more in common, better chemistry, and a better understanding of each other. the Helnik ship seems to stem from some sense of duty that they have for each other rather than actual chemistry.

….I will get major flames for this, but I almost feel like the book will be better as the Netflix show than the book. The narration style just didn’t do it for me. Also, if they follow the plot and kill my boy Matthias, I will have words.

Book Reviews

Thoughts on Serpent & Dove

  1. I loved that this book was French inspired.
    I took French in high school and literally have never used it, so this book gave me a reason to use all that French knowledge. But really, the names, the words, the love of sweet bread/sticky buns, the architecture even was just *Chef’s kiss.* To start, knowing that it was French inspired, I could totally see in my mind’s eye the way the theater that Lou stayed in looked and the way the town looked from the rooftop of the theater.
  2. Lou and Reid were tense, passionate, and all consuming.
    It’s no secret that I love enemies to lovers and when you have an arranged marriage on top of that, I’ll just be here fanning myself. I loved Lou literally running into Reid and then slipping away, only to stumble upon him once more and being forced into marrying him. She pushes his buttons in all the right ways, and he helps her to open her mind up to seeing the world from new perspectives. Their slow roll from hatred to love was a tumble that I am here for.
  3. Reid was adorably naive, but he was a strong character.
    Reid was an orphan raised by the Archbishop and because of that his worldview was extremely narrow. I loved that Mahurin kept true to that and allowed Reid to be a little closed minded before he met Lou. She kept him true to his vow and ensured that he was a little awkward with romance and didn’t know much about the world outside being a Chass. Reid was a definite strong character. He stuck to his values even when he probably didn’t want to, like when Celie wanted him to leave his wife or use derogatory language toward her. The best part about it though was that this was in line for his character as a whole and not a result of a budding romance with Lou.
  4. The world was a little underdeveloped, but that is okay in this instance.
    I am usually a big stickler in the fantasy genre about having good world building and fleshing out details of the magic systems and the culture. In this particular case, I am glad that we didn’t spend pages upon pages on how that works because it has slowly come out with the plot, and I kind of feel like we are in Reid’s shoes learning about magic and witches with him. It also allowed for Mahurin to keep the pace of the book at a steady chug without having sudden stops in the plot to allow for details to be dumped on you.
  5. Ansel is a precious baby that must be protected at all costs.
    You should know by now that I am also a lover of side characters. I get attached to them and their stories and I need to know more about precious Ansel. He seems like such an interesting character because he was very gung ho about catching witches, but he was also very open to Lou after he discovered what she was and how he figured out what she was.

I’m anxiously awaiting the next book as well as panicking because what if it doesn’t live up to my expectations!

See you after the next chapter, bookworms,

Cayla

Book Reviews

Review: The Bridge Kingdom

Rating: 🌟🌟🌟/5

Overall Feelings: I liked this book, but it wasn’t one I’d add to my pile of I would read over and over again. I will definitely read it again, but it isn’t going to be one that I automatically reach for. I also think some of this is because I’m not a fan of third person point of view.

Lara: So, Lara is an interesting character. She spends fifteen years of her life locked in a palace in the desert learning to be ruthless, a killer, a spy, and the perfect wife to bring Ithicana to its knees. She ‘poisons’ her sisters to grant her the ability to see her father’s plan through. Her father is atrocious, and I feel that she gave him a little bit too much trust and grace after everything that he did. I feel like after fifteen years of training to be an assassin and a spy, she should have done a little bit better of a job. At times, she seemed a little naive, immature, and out of character for what she is written to be.

Aren: I actually liked Aren. He seems like a good guy that cares about his people. His relationship with Jor is fun, and I like the interactions between him and the various soldiers. I like the way his head works, and I wish I got to see more of how he ruled Ithicana. We saw a good bit of Lara without Aren, but in his POVs there wasn’t enough done without Lara. I wanted to see more of him running through the bridge, doing his Kingly duties, and interacting with his soldiers. Low key though, he’s a little too forgiving. Like be angry! Your wife deceived you, was going to overthrow your country, and is a spy, but hey that’s okay. I love you.

Side characters: I thought Jor was a good mentor for Aren. I would like to see more of him. He seemed to be a good person with looking out for Aren and the country’s best interests. I’ve seen people complain about the “crass” language of the soldiers, but that is what makes their characters feel more realistic. Having been around those types in the real world, that is very much how they would speak. There’s a reason people refer to swearing as “like a sailor.” Ahnna…..I don’t know how to feel about her. She was fine, but also a little flat.

Romance: For being listed as “Romantic Fantasy,” I felt like this book lacked romance. There was definitely fantasy, but when the author said slow burn, she meant that there’s only a scrap of romance. They “love” eachother, but when she is doing her whole reveal about the spy life, why didn’t she reveal her sisters and what she did. She loves this man and has seen how he acts and that he is honest, so why does she believe her father over him when her father effectively abused her for 15 years?

I wish that their romance had more sexual tension and more build up to the scene where they did have sex. In addition, when they sneak back into her home country and Aren sees his old fling, I cringed so hard. This scene bothered me because Aren, for being a good guy, seemed like he was getting ready to have his way with her and would have cheated on Lara had it not been for Jor.

World Building: I have a good grasp on Ithicana, but the rest of the world fell a little flat to me. Even Lara’s homeland was a little flat. I thought using the bridge was a neat idea to move goods, but I really didn’t understand the need for secrecy?

I have book two in my cart to buy, but it won’t be on my next to read any time soon.

See you after the next chapter!
Cayla

ARC Reviews

ARC Review: Witch’s Curse

Rating: 4.5/5

World Building: In paranormal books, I like to take time to look at the building of the world and the paranormal creatures/culture that the author builds. Sloane Murphy did a great job of creating the culture between the witches, demons, hunters, and the rest of the crew. I felt like this was an important part of this book because Murphy could have easily relied on the other portion of the series to do this for her and required readers to have read that before this series. I think great authors, like Murphy, take the time to continue to flesh out the world in each book regardless of where it falls in the series.

Characters:

Fallon: I really liked her and felt that she had good depth. Her sass was fun to read and I liked that despite her hardcore crush on Colt, she didn’t cave to him. I appreciate when authors write characters that don’t begin to blend together. Remy, Fallon’s best friend, does not feel the same as Fallon, which can be a difficult thing to keep throughout a series. Fallon has her own goals and motivations just like Remy has her own ideals.

Colt: I loved to hate him only to love him. He drove me nuts at the beginning, but he grew on me over time. I liked that Murphy added in the reincarnation element to immortality. I feel like this is something that we do not see often in books with these themes. I also think that Murphy’s overall development through the book of Colt allowed me to move from disliking him initially to actually feeling like he was someone I could enjoy seeing our FMC loving.

Relationships:

Of course we have our relationship between Colt and Fallon, which was spicy and I can’t wait to see more of, but the time that Murphy spent fleshing out the relationship between Fallon and her mother and sister was time well spent. It felt real and did not leave me feeling like it was a stale representation of a family. She gave them life and made the mother/daughter relationship feel like the real relationship most mothers have with their kids as they grow older: a friendship and a partnership.

Fallon and Remy, sometimes I feel like Fallon forgot herself trying to help Remy at times, but I love Fallon’s devotion to those she cares about, and this relationship really plays on that.

I’ll be so impatiently waiting for the next book!

See you after the next chapter, bookworms!
Cayla